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Sherlock Fic: 6:37 AM

Written for the sherlock100 prompts 4 & 5 -- "insides" and "outsides."
Dedicated to labourslamp.  :-D







6:37 AM

Blind alley. 

Overflowing skip.

Six men.

One kneels and lifts his camera.

One stands, arms crossed

One paces and gesticulates.

One slouches, hands in his pockets.

One lifts a radio to his lips.

The last is prone and motionless.

A dog slinks past.

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Morrison

Mangy dog. 

Could make an interesting model.  Professor Moreno… she had been partial to grim images. 

Wonder what she would’ve made of crime scene photography?   Morbid artistry or a commercial betrayal of the art?

Dog’s gone already! 

Corpses really are the best models if you’ve got the stomach for that sort of thing…

John

Bloody freezing out here.  And I was hoping for a lie-in, too.

Poor dog.  Looks hungry, but not injured or scarred... probably well-cared for.  Must have run off in the park and gotten lost… doesn’t know how to find his own food.  Shame.  And some poor kid missing him.

And it’s just so cold… even for a dog.

If Sherlock doesn’t hurry up, I’m going back home.

Dimmock

He’ll  be right.  He’s always right!  I have to figure it out before he…

What kind of dog is…

Focus!

Tattoos look familiar.  Gangs?  Not uncommon to find victims of gang fights in this area.  There was one only two miles from here last week.  He probably doesn’t know that.  He’ll have some absurd theory, but I have the facts!

Sherlock

Dimmock will assume gang killing because of the incident last week.  But the tattoos aren’t associated with any gangs in the area.  Position of wound and gunpowder marks suggest that killing was unexpected.  Looks more like an execution than a fight, but this is hardly the place for an execution of any kind—not to mention the fact that there is no sign of any sort of struggle on the body or in the area.   This is personal… but why?

Labrador and Border collie mix?  Looks like Reynold.  Clever dog!—Most clever dog!  Could find anything if you showed it to him first, and then hid it.  Would’ve made a better detective than Dimmock, anyway.

Contents of Reynold’s stomach when he died—fascinating!  Shame he hadn’t been clever enough to avoid those mushrooms, because the rest of the dissection had proved that he was in very good health.

This dog has never been in good health—clearly born to a pedigreed border collie bitch who’d gotten loose.  Spent some little time in a shelter, but escaped the first person to adopt him.  Probably wouldn’t be as clever as Reynold.

Shame there was no way to track him.  He’d make an interesting study when he’d died.

Stanley

It’s too early to be on shift.  Nothing else is awake.  Not even a bird.  Was there really any reason to hurry and look at this dead bloke?

Dog

People!

Blocking my skip!

Never seen people here before.

Weird.
 

Comments

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litlover12
Nov. 30th, 2011 01:26 pm (UTC)
Well done!! I love all the different perspectives. Including the dog's!
goldvermilion87
Nov. 30th, 2011 01:52 pm (UTC)
Thanks! :-)
poetxonxjunex91
Nov. 30th, 2011 04:30 pm (UTC)
Wow! I love the writing style~

this fic is fun~
goldvermilion87
Nov. 30th, 2011 05:01 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
eanor
Nov. 30th, 2011 05:02 pm (UTC)
I like it! :-) (Although it took me an embarrassing amount of time to figure out the sixth man was the corpse - i kept wondering why there were only 5 people thinking... >.< )
I really liked how Sherlock anticipates Dimmock's thoughts and proves them wrong immediately and I loved the perspectives of Stanley and the dog! ^^
goldvermilion87
Nov. 30th, 2011 07:37 pm (UTC)
:-D

I considered what to do with the dead guy... but decided not to be toooooooooo corny. :-)

And I'm really glad you enjoyed it. It was fun to write.
litlover12
Dec. 2nd, 2011 12:15 am (UTC)
Sherlock mentally correcting Dimmock's mental observation was perfect. So totally Sherlock. :-)
goldvermilion87
Dec. 2nd, 2011 12:19 am (UTC)
:-D Thanks!
sabrinaphynn
Nov. 30th, 2011 05:19 pm (UTC)
Woof!
Very well done. I like the style. And I am with John, hurry up and get back home, it's cold...
goldvermilion87
Nov. 30th, 2011 07:37 pm (UTC)
Re: Woof!
Thank you! Glad you liked it. :-)
capt_facepalm
Nov. 30th, 2011 06:17 pm (UTC)
I love how John is wrong about the dog in a typically tropey Watsony way!
goldvermilion87
Nov. 30th, 2011 07:37 pm (UTC)
Curses! Foiled again in anti-tropeyness!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
jenny_starseed
Dec. 1st, 2011 04:15 am (UTC)
Nicely done. I like how Sherlock's POV has more words, of course he would have much more rapid thoughts than those around him. Loved the dog's pov as well. :)
goldvermilion87
Dec. 1st, 2011 04:27 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I love writing Sherlock's rapid-fire thoughts, so it was fun to write. :-)

The dog's POV is actually a bit of a joke, but I no one has mentioned it yet. :-P
rox712
Dec. 1st, 2011 01:08 pm (UTC)
Last one made me laugh out loud. Like it.
goldvermilion87
Dec. 1st, 2011 04:28 pm (UTC)
Thanks. :-) It's actually an allusion/joke there at the end... dunno if anyone's picked up on it yet.
litlover12
Dec. 2nd, 2011 12:16 am (UTC)
Oh dear, I'm not getting the allusion. Can we have a hint?
goldvermilion87
Dec. 2nd, 2011 12:19 am (UTC)
Bahaha! Well... it references another favorite fandom of mine...
litlover12
Dec. 2nd, 2011 12:37 am (UTC)
I'm thinking . . . Cabin Pressure?
goldvermilion87
Dec. 2nd, 2011 12:41 am (UTC)
Nope... a much older fandom than that. :-P
kakareen
Dec. 3rd, 2011 10:28 pm (UTC)
My favorite bit was Morrison. I see the world that way a bit, or hear it, rather, hear it that way. Lots of noise I hear as music potential.

And I found it funny how everyone (except Stanley) got distracted by the dog.
goldvermilion87
Dec. 3rd, 2011 11:06 pm (UTC)
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.

I figured there's always at least one person in every group who doesn't notice something that's distracting everyone else. :-)

[I am often that person]
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